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As we know, a picture is worth a thousand words, but do those words have any meaning? This question can determine just how aware we are of the theme of a book. A book’s theme is the main idea of how you think the book relates to real life. Some examples of themes would be the demand for more material wealth leads to dishonesty and venal, powerful feelings can guide one in the wrong direction, and irrational beliefs can make the real world seem unnoticeable. The theme of greed corrupts exists in the novel The Hound of the Baskervilles. Stapleton, a greedy naturalist and villain, planned to kill every capable inheritance of the Baskerville estate so that he could get it himself. His greed lead to the lying of that his wife was his sister, the hiding of his true relation to the Baskerville family, and the faking of his own death. Another example was that of the actions of Selden, the Notting Hill murderer. To keep himself from getting caught, he brought his sister, Mrs. Barrymore, and her husband, Mr. Barrymore, into the mess for the safety of his own self being. He also killed so many people for his amusement, which turned him into a blood thirst murder on the run. Selden is now forced to live in starvation because of his greed to kill. This shows that the demand of ones own wealth can make a change for the worst. “The Cask of Amontillado” by Edgar Allen Poe demonstrates the theme of strong emotions can lead one astray. Montresor’s feelings of revenge towards Fortunato is one example of this theme. Montresor was so focused on revenge that he was willing to and succeeded in killing Fortunato. Another example was Fortunato’s love for wine and treatment toward Montresor. Ultimately, Montresor’s motive for revenge can from the treatment he received from Fortunato. Also, Fortunato’s love for wine obviously was the reason why he accompanied Montresor into the depths of the catacombs. This was an unfortunate ending for Fortunato who blindly walked into Montresor’s trap. These are two examples of how “The Cask of Amontillado” supports this theme. The theme of fear and superstition often obscure reality relates to the short story of “The Lottery.” The villagers in this story believed that killing a person would bring them good luck. In real life, this is not the case. This is an example of this theme because murder and death are not a good thing. Another example of this theme would be the reaction of the villagers when they heard that the northern village was getting rid of the lottery. Old Man Warner said, “Pack of crazy fools. Listening to the young folks, nothing’s good enough for them. Next thing you know they’ll be wanting to go back to live in caves.” Old Man Warner, the oldest villager, thinks that people without the lottery will soon turn into savages. However, by putting this barbaric act in a civilized setting, it would make them the true savages for murdering for their own selfish will. This proves that fear and unreasonable thinking can make it seem like real life doesn’t exist. Can you now see that what we read really can effect how we think and act in life? These themes: the excessive desire to acquire more leads to terrible actions, efficacious emotional states can lead one off track, and reasonless thinking can make life unreal, show us how stories can relate to our world. Now take a minute and think about how themes like these have effected your own life.
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- I tried, but it's too long. How did you manage to get it all in. That's what I wonder... good luck. Sorry tired after work!
- Here ya go... first let me explain how I did it. I deleted sections just to make life easier for you (so you didn't have to read through everything). Don't DELETE anything I did, it was correct so I got it out of my way. Some things I changed just because it sounded awkward, while other things were grammatically incorrect. Overall, it was well written. I'm sorry it's difficult to tell what was corrected, it's just the only means provided by the format. Good luck!
Some examples of themes would be the demand for more material wealth leads to dishonesty; venal, powerful feelings can guide one in the wrong direction; and irrational beliefs can make the real world seem unnoticeable. (replace the commas with semicolons- too many commas)
The theme of "greed corrupts" exists in the novel The Hound of the Baskervilles. (Title must be in italics)Stapleton, a greedy naturalist and villain, planned to kill everyone capable of gaining the inheritance of the Baskerville estate so that he could get it himself.
His greed lead to the lying of his true relation with his wife (what you had was awkward), the hiding of his true relation to the Baskerville family, and the faking of his own death.
He also killed many people for his amusement, which turned him into a blood thirst murder on the run.
This shows that the demand of one's own wealth can make a change for the worst.
Another example was Fortunato’s love for wine and how he treated Montresor. Ultimately, Montresor’s motive for revenge came from the treatment he received from Fortunato.
This was an unfortunate ending for Fortunato, who blindly walked into Montresor’s trap.
The theme of "fear and superstition often obscure reality" relates to the short story of “The Lottery.”
However, by putting this barbaric act in a civilized setting, it would make them (who?) the true savages for murdering for their own selfish will. This proves that fear and unreasonable thinking can make it seem like real life doesn’t exist.
Can you now see that what we read really can effect how we think and act in life? These themes: the excessive desire to acquire more leads to terrible actions, efficacious emotional states can lead one off track, and reasonless thinking can make life unreal show us how stories can relate to our world.
- There are a number of errors here -- including run-on sentences,
an omitted apostrophe, misspellings, some clumsy wording,
etc. One example: in the last line, "effected" should be
"affected." Assuming you have proof read it, you should get a
tutor, rather than relying on this site.
- besides their proof-reading, don't forget to indent! :)
